Localization Feedback Request

Fortunately I had just gone through my second playthrough with the English dub on. I found three errors with the text.

Error 1


Error 2


Error 3

Spanish localization is good overall but there are a few mistakes here and there. I'll screenshot all of them on my next playthrough and post them here.

Nice work there, congrats! I was just about to point out some of them, but you got there first lol. Now, being a translator myself I was very curious to play it in Portuguese when I found out it was translated (I remember reading somewhere the game wouldn't have translations, but here we are). Overall I found it good, it doesn't have any major negative impacts on the user experience, but of course it may vary.

One thing I always try to keep in mind is that we don't know the conditions in which the translation/localization and testing were made, deadlines, etc.

I also got confused by some of the translations, especially the "O" for "G" in gold, always made me think it was a 0 and I had more money than I thought. I think they could've used a gold coin icon instead with a G (or a gold icon without any letters on it), so much more easier to understand what it represents. On a side note, I had a good laugh with "pescotapa", I haven't heard it in a long while and it also got me wondering how much of the audience would understand it.

Question , I compiled some I can recall for now.

First dialogue

Translation missing

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EN

"But I am the only one who can. The shard experiments prepared me for combat. Let them amount to something."

PT-BR

"Mas sou a única que pode. As experiências com fragmentos me prepararam para o combate. Que eles seu valor então."

There's a word missing from the translation here, probably "mostrem" between "eles" and "seu". "Que eles mostrem seu valor então".

Eventually

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EN

"The strength you gain from it is undeniable, but eventually the crystal will devour you."

PT-BR

"A força que você ganha com isso é inegável, mas eventualmente… o cristal irá devorá-la."

"Eventualmente" here has a different meaning from "eventually" in English. They're false friends. In Portuguese it expresses a possibility, a hypothesis. In English it has the sense of "in the end" or a consequence. Some options to translate the sentence would be:

"A força que você ganha com isso é inegável, mas um dia… o cristal irá devorá-la."

"A força que você ganha com isso é inegável, mas consequentemente… o cristal irá devorá-la."

"A força que você ganha com isso é inegável, mas no fim das contas… o cristal irá devorá-la."

Dialogue from good ending

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EN

"You're very welcome. Come on, let's go home."

PT-BR

"E eu vou fazer o que puder para não decepcionar você. Ande, vamos para casa."

First sentence seems a bit over translated for me. A simple "De nada" (you're welcome) or "Não tem por que agradecer" (don't mention it/no problem) would be enough.

Menu

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EN

"Favorite"

PT-BR

"Favorito". Although this is not major, I think it should be "Favoritar", given all the other commands are verbs (Usar, Ordenar, Voltar) instead of nouns

Aello Item Drop

"Monster Bird Tear"

Another item which the translation is overflowing. "Lágrima de Pássaro Monstruoso" is too long. "Lágrima de Ave Monstruosa" may be an option.

Spanish Post 1: Monsters' names:

The objective of this post is to provide the most appropiated names for all enemies into Latinamerican Spanish.

Number	Original English	Suggested Spanish Translation
1	Morte	Morte
2	Seama	*Seama
3	Cannon Morte - Suggested to change into "Morte Cannon"	*Cañón Morte
4	Aello	*Aelo OR *Nicótoe - Although in the game is written in japanes as アエロー : AeRo,  also means "arrow" . Due that it is the name of one of the Harpy sisters, it is up to keep either Aelo or Nícotoe.
5	Ghost	Fantasma
6	Dullahammer	*Dulamartillo
7	Giant Rat	Rata Gigante
8	Bone Morte - Suggested to change into "Morte Bone"	*Morte Lanzahuesos
9	Bat	Murciélago
10	Gieremund	Gieremund
11	Blood Grinder Knight	*Armadura Trituradora - Originally "Outsider Knight" in the japanese version of the game. From now on, all outsider armors will be named "Armadura" with the characteristic weapon.
12	Sabnock	Sabnock
13	Moco Weed	*Hiedra Carnívora - "Moco Plant" sounds odd, worse in spanish.
14	Toad	Sapo
15	Plume Parma	*Cerdo Volador - Quite obvious.
16	Barbatos	*Bárbatos - Notice the tilde in the first "á"
17	Carabosse	Carabosse - A fairy that belongs to the french culture, so it must be kept as it is, and there is not a spanish equivalent.
18	Simio	Simio
19	Zagan	Zagan
20	Poltergeist	Poltergeist
21	Ordog	*Sabueso Pútrido - This spanish form is more attractive.
22	Gargoyle	Gárgola
23	Killer Barber	Barbero Asesino
24	Demon	Demonio
25	Buer	Buer
26	Nyabon	*Miaubon - にゃ: nya is the japanese form for cats to meow, in spanish is "Miau". A close approach to spanish is "Miaubon".
27	Scyte Mite	Ácaro de la Guadaña
28	Dullahamer Head	*Cabeza del Dulamartillo
29	Buer Armor	Armadura Buer
30	Wolfman	Licántropo
31	Thunder Elemental	Elemental de Trueno
32	Carriage Morte	*Cañon Morte con Ruedas
33	Dantalion	*Dantaleón
34	Rul'sha	Rul'sha
35	Decarabia	Decarabia
36	Shovel Armor	*Armadura Pala
37	Malediction	*Cabeza Maldita - "Maledicencia" is quite odd in spanish, and it means also "Curse". A compound noun fixes the problem.
38	Celaeno	Celeno
39	Shield Outsider	*Armadura Escudo
40	Puppy	Cachorro
41	Lili	*Lilim - It comes from the Japanese name of the monster, リリム or Lilimu . You killed the "m", suggested to bring it back.
42	Assassin	Asesino
43	Dragon	Dragón
44	Kunekune	Kunekune
45	Poison Toad	Sapo Venenoso
46	Sidhe	*Daine - Originally written ディネ・シー: "Daine-Shi", but "Daine" is a good approach for this fairy in Spanish.
47	Bomber Morte	*Morte Bomba
48	Mimic	*Imitador - "Mimico" is odd in spanish, so please use the word suggested
49	Light Elemental	Elemental de Luz
50	Ocypete	Ocípete
51	Cyhyraeth	Cyhyraeth - Kahyrice - カヒライス from the source I found. Nothing to do with the English name. Better the proper welsh name
52	Chair Mimic	*Imitador de Silla
53	Leraje	Leraje
54	Bloodbringer	*Espada Sangrienta - Fits better the spanish name.
55	Lance Armor	*Armadura Lanza
56	Tamako-Death	*Tamako Mortal - Yes, it is Tamako * Death, but in spanish sounds better "Mortal" than "Muerte". So here it is. "Letal" is quite different.
57	Triwheel Buer	*Carruaje Buer
58	Gamigin	Gamigin
59	Titania	Titania
60	Axe Outsider	*Armadura Hacha
61	Scylla	Escila
62	Forneus	Forneus
63	Deeseama	*Diseama
64	Water Leaper	*Saltador de Agua
65	Glashtyn	Glashtyn
66	Seeker	Ojo Buscador - Just added a deeper description to get a better name to this monster
67	Archdemon	Archidemonio
68	Amy	Ami - アミー. Better to keep that name as it is, because it is not a woman so far, and the monster description doesn't match with the english name.
69	Allocer	Alocer
70	Vul'sha	Vul'sha
71	Living Fossil	Fósil Viviente
72	Rocky	Rocky
73	Dark Elemental	Elemental de Oscuridad
74	Lamashtu	Lamashtu
75	Macaron	Macarrón
76	Blood Bug	*Bicho Sangriento
77	Fire Elemental	Elemental de Fuego
78	Volcano Morte	*Morte Volcánico - In spanish, names of monster are in Neutral form. "Volcánica" is a femenine noun, so "Volcanico" is neutral and fits to the monster.
79	Hellhound	Sabueso Infernal
80	Zepar	Zepar
81	Deathtrap	Trampa Mortal
82	Gusion	Gusion
83	Gaap	Gaap
84	Haagenti	Haagenti
85	Kamikaze	Kamikaze
86	Ninja	Ninja
87	Giant Moco	*Hiedra Carniívora Gigante
88	Giant Bat	Murciélago Gigante
89	Giant Toad	Sapo Gigante
90	Giant Cannon	*Cañon Morte Gigante
91	Giant Morte	Morte Gigante
92	Giant Buer	Buer Gigante
93	Chariot Buer	*Carroza Buer
94	Marbas	Marbas
95	Silver Wolfman	*Licántropo Plateado - "Argénteo" is odd in spanish. Better with this adjective.
96	Abyssal Guardian	*Guardian Abismal - "Abisal" is not common in spanish. "Abismal" is a better word related with the abyss.
97	Harrier	Perseguidor
98	Ice Elemental	Elemental de Hielo
99	Tracer	*Ojo Rastreador
100	Gusion Cannon	*Cañón Gusión
101	G Axe Outsider	*Armadura Gran Hacha
102	Demon Lord	*Señor de los Demonios - This name is quite spooky, rather than "Demonio Supremo".
103	Eight Bit Zombie	*Zombi de 8 bits - All of them better with the number instead the written form.
104	Eight Bit Ghost	*Fantasma de 8 bits
105	Eight Bit Skull	*Craneo de 8 bits - "Calavera" implies all the bones of the human body. "Craneo" is better for this.
106	Eight Bit Overlord	*Señor Demonio de 8 bits - "Caudillo" is more used in politics. Better to use "Señor Demonio".
107	Master Carpenter	Carpintero Maestro
108	Revenant	Resucitado
109	Millionaire's Bane	*Pesadilla del Millonario - "Flagelo" means "illness" or "suffering". "Pesadilla" is closer to "Bane" in meaning.
110	Vepar	Vepar
111	Zangetsu	Zangetsu
112	Craftwork	*Vitral Infernal - The english name translates "Artesanía", so it is nice to have a spooky name with the adjective "infernal". "Vitralus" is bad written too, is "Vitraluz". I'd keep with "Vitral Infernal"
113	Andrealphus	Andrealphus
114	Valac	Valac
115	Glutton Train	*Locomotora del Averno - "Glutton" Doesn't fit at all, and train translates "train". I suggest to use "locomotora" due that is the head of the train and obviously, is the boss.
116	Bathin	Bathin
117	Gebel	Gebel
118	Bloodless	*Duquesa Sangrienta - It is quite evident that this character is based on duchess Bathory. It is a better name for this monster. "La Exangüe" is not properly translated... it is similar into spanish like "anemic", but "exangüe" is not common. Hence, a total revamp of the name suits this monster.
119	Alfred	Alfred
120	Doppelganger	Doppelgänger - Please note the "ä" that must be written
121	Orobas	Orobas
122	Zangetsu	Zangetsu
123	Valefar	*Valefor - This name is valid too. Just to add a masculine property to the monster
124	Gremory	Gremory - No spanish approach. I thought "Gremoria" could fit, but it doesn't exist.
125	Dominique	Dominique
126	Bael	Bael
127	Olrok Dracule	Olrok Draculea - We can get an agreement to not to use the very obvious name of Dracula, but looking the original name, is Draculea, so here it is.

Easy now, I wouldn't say Spanish from Spain is 'weird' or anything like that, my friend. Language is language, and they're all good in their own ways. But I agree with you, in practical terms it might be best to have the Spanish translation done in the Latin American dialects since so many people live in that region, so it makes sense to translate for the folks who'll be buying the most copies In any case, though, even the Latin American spanish localization needs work, so keep paying attention to the script and highlighting mistakes, everyone, all this is really helpful!

Hey, thanks your comments! Yeah the subjective points are hard to reach an agreement, and most of the time it'll vary depending on who is doing the job. I'll just point out that we're perfectly in synth in this point: if in the original script (in this case, japanese) there's something written in a different language than the original, then that word should be left as is in translations. In this case, Bloodless is indeed called Bloodless in japanese. And actually, this happens with "Shard" and "Shardbinders" as well, while in the Brazilian Portuguese translation they were translated to "Fragmento" and "Fragmentário". I somehow forgot to point it out in my first post lol.

Hi!
There are a lot of small mistakes in the french translation. And it would take too long to screenshot everything.
Would it be possible to get like a mega script of every sentences to work on?